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Speaking Poetry

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the night air is cold,
but we don't notice a thing.
We are speaking poetry,
and to some one else there is no meaning.

But as long as these words can trickle down my mouth,
and play across my tongue,
I hope that I can remember,
these lyrics that were never sung.

The night is cold,
but the words aint dead yet.
Our minds buzzing,
with the words that haven't yet been said.

Just the two of us speaking poetry,
lost in our own little world.
Just the two of us lost in spoken lyrics,
Wanting nothing more than this.

Getting lost amongst the world,
wrapped up in our own little words.
Whispering secrets that we will forever keep,
and falling in love as we speak.

Maybe I am crazy,
But at least things are making sense.
For once in my whole life,
I am talking poetry.
And it sounds so sweet.

I can't help what I do or say,
cause you just brighten up my day.
Your smile brightens up the darkness,
and your eyes tell an untold tale.

And we sit side by side,
enjoying each other's company,
we cant help,
but speak in poetry.
The language tickles my tongue.
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:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Overall
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This is a love poem at its finest, it captures the idea that when someone is with a person they love, that person is the only one around- in their eyes.

it invoked a feeling of curiosity in me, for the characters, and their poetic nature i suppose. This poem has kind of a mystical feel to me, two people in their own kind of world... oblivious to the world around. I imagined a cute couple under a tree in a field... holding each other. how romantic. <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b…" width="15" height="15" alt=":D" title=":D (Big Grin)" />

to me the lines in your poem seem like they keep trying to rhyme and really dont, that bugs me. i write mainly free verse and if two lines rhyme i pull out my thesaurus and change the word, or sometimes i even change the gist of the line all together... but im nit picky like that.
so in my eyes thats the only problem with this poem.

<img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b…" width="15" height="15" alt=":D" title=":D (Big Grin)" /> graceful, to say the least.